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Re: High School Vacation
Aurora: I sat there in shock for a moment, before pulling on his shirt and shorts. I took a big whiff of his shirt, smelling him. I sighed in pleasure, ...
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Re: High School Vacation
Aurora: I whimpered and let Colt hold me tightly. Tears streaked down my face as my body was wracked with compulsions. It throbbed from the whip and between my legs ...
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Re: Life, Friends, Books, Love, and Awesome Coffee
Amy: I blushed. "Yeah...I show. But not very well." I continued petting my black horse. I always prefered stallions, but in English form of riding, they wouldn't let you. They ...
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Re: Wake
I really like this! I like how you repeat "wake me up" at the end! It's really good! Keep up the good work! Sorry I couldn't be more helpful. =*( ...
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Re: High School Vacation
Aurora: I laid there, whimpering and shuttering. I closed my eyes as my body shook from what had just happened. I was so scared and my whole body ached. Blood ...
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Re: High School Vacation
**Picked a random room. She's tied up and doesn't know what's going on.** Aurora: He laughed and pushed himself into me. I screamed. I was sure the whole place could ...
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Re: The edges of all things turn in
It was confusing to me what you were talking about. I would suggest lengthening it so that the reader knows what you are trying to say. A mental picture is ...
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Re: Life, Friends, Books, Love, and Awesome Coffee
Amy: I petted my horse happily and smiled. I loved him. I heard footsteps behind me and whipped around. "Can I help you?" I asked, blushing. (There, TN) Brian: I ...
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Re: High School Vacation
Aurora: A startled ex yanked his thing out of my mouth. I whimpered. Not because it was gone, but because I was lying there naked with a horrid person played ...
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Re: My Ghost
I think this is really good! It seems a bit repetitive some places, but really heart wrenching, especially because I know where it's coming from. It was really good. I ...
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Re: High School Vacation
**Ignore the last post** Aurora: I whimpered as he played with me, touching and eating. I growled, but my body responded. "You little whore." I whimpered. "Suck." I refused and ...
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Re: High School Vacation
Aurora: I growled as I was thrown into a hotel room. I whimpered as I was striped and down on the bed roughly, bound to all four corners. My ex ...
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Re: Life, Friends, Books, Love, and Awesome Coffee
Brian: I blushed but kept my mouth shut. I wanted to kiss her again, but I knew she would never believe that that was one of my first real kisses. ...
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Re: Life, Friends, Books, Love, and Awesome Coffee
Brian: I bit my lip. "Wonderful kiss." I said, still blushing. This was why I stuck to flirting. It didn't involve me acting like a stupid idiot with pretty girls. ...
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Re: Life, Friends, Books, Love, and Awesome Coffee
Brian: I sighed and pulled my shirt on, a little shaken. "S-see you tonight?" I asked, trying not to look at her bottom. She was beautiful. And she had just ...
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